A poem called Forbidden?

Forbidden


Written by Semper Fi Reborn





She seemed to rise


From the surface and sprout flowers


A bouquet of pleasant petals


Arranged to please the eyes


Her branches


Flowed out from her sides


Then slightly upward


Toward the sky


In a serene dance with the wind.


The sun shined on her


Happily


Braggingly


Pleased with this ability to


Caress her


Hold her in the light


Of a bright morn


She was created to stand there


In the center of the garden


Unscathed


Untouched


Purely tempting


For her fruit was forbidden.

A poem called Forbidden?
wow..........wow.


I absolutely love it.


Thank you sooo much:)
Reply:I do have a little problem with the 'she' of it all, but what the heck, I'm not gonna let a gender issue stop me from saying


TERRIFIC


It's a beautiful day when I


Stay out of the way of


The Tree Of Knowledge Of Good And Evil


:)
Reply:You had me right up until the last line.





5.0/10 The picture is a little fuzzy.
Reply:Do you publish your poems? This one is really beautiful and to the point!





You do have a bit of a stumble in the second line that you may want to fine tune.
Reply:Beautiful.


As usual Semper, your gift shines!


God Bless your day!
Reply:this is one of your best one's yet!!!
Reply:I have entered my poems into a contest and i am a published author and I'm only in Gr. 8. I really think you should consider sharing them with the world. Your poems are beautiful and truly from the heart. If you want some contests feel free to ask!
Reply:Wonderful, Semp. The description of the Tree of Life is remarkable,and such a message. There are somethings in this world that we,as human beings, and most importantly children of God,are not to interfere with. There are things to admire in nature,but unfortunately,as with Adam and Eve in the garden of Eden,we still meddle with balance of nature that God created. This should be a wake-up call to leave well enough alone,and once again,bless you Semp for some eloquent,thought provoking word.